Month: October 2018

The chapter I chose to read was chapter one in They Say/I say, Starting with What Others Are Saying. The reason to why I chose this chapter in this book is because I struggle with connecting my main idea back to my theme and or claim sentence. In this chapter, it explains how to introduce the standard view and then to follow up with the support of your claim. This chapters, explains the correct template for making what they say into your own say. For example, what you believe is to be correct or what you assume is to be a valid reason. Another thing to add about this chapter is how to keep your idea of what you say in perspective. The reader won’t be able to follow the unfolding response, therefore, it is the writer’s job to keep reminding the readings what the claim is supposed to be.

Before:

“Anyone can make a masterpiece but artist are the ones that can alter a societies perspective of the art presented. These elitist thought that if you did not create an image of your own masterpiece than you were like everyone else. What the EA’s do not comprehend is that art stems from other artist and helps them to create a mural that affects a greater population.” 

After:

A number of the Effective Altruism have suggested that a masterpiece has to be your own thoughts. You would think that a piece of artwork needs the aid of others to gather ideas and new thinkings. At the same time, the Effective altruism sees this perspective as taking from other’s, they want artist ideas or thoughts to be original to this world. If they were not to be then you as an artist are to be plagiarizing the world. In conclusion, as suggested earlier by the effective altruism, the defendants thought of art not obtaining both ways. Their statement suggests that art is supposed to be originally, however, art needs both perspectives in order to grow and inspire other artists within the world.

I think that in the world we live in today that there should be an equal balance when it comes to both art and sciences. Art and Science are key concepts that help our world go round and with combining these two ideas together the world itself could become a stronger unit. In this short passage, “We must Protect U.S. investment in Scientific Knowledge,” written by Mark B. Boslough, Congress view’s science as a waste of time but also, a major waste of money. Congress feels as is scientific knowledge does not relay enough information to the world. Congress expresses it setback about science, “They think that spending on science s like throwing money into a big hole in the ground,” as they do not agree with the trial and error ordeal. That with these types of test it is a waste and congress thinks the money could be spent elsewhere rather than the knowledge of science. If Boslough connected his idea’s back to the nature of art than Congress would believe the importance of science and how this concept contributes to the world. In comparison, “The Future of Science…is Art?” by John Lehere he mentions both the importance of how art and science correlate with one another.  As the state, “In doing science, even though words and equations are used with intention of having precise meaning, it is almost impossible not to reason by physical analogy, no to form mental pictures, not to imagine balls bouncing and pendulums swinging.”  With the help of art in science, it enables one’s mind to use images and the form of art to understand the bigger picture. Overall, with the power of art and science, it allows the mind to process the importance of how these two concepts come together as one.

STEM has it owns uniqueness behind it and for no reason should it convert into STEAM. As art enables a student to have a diverse outlook on how they interpret information in a school environment. Whereas math, science, technology, and engineering does not allow for this diverse thinking for it only allows an individual to think one way and only one way. Yo-Yo Mama in his reading expresses, “The values behind arts integration-collaboration, flexible thinking, and disciplined imagination- lead to the capacity to innovate”. If Art and STEAM were to combine together than you would solely lose these concepts and the diversity of one’s thinking will diminish to nothing. Even thought Yo-Yo mama think that art and STEAM should come together than you would lose these major concepts that art displays and then his argument would be very conversational to himself. Although, he argued the importance of art he wants to combine these two ideas together as one. Yet, those around him acknowledge that these two groups are separated for a reason and that these two group would be better off separate. Being separate it would provide an empathetic component to the students if they were kept separate from one another.

1) What is the surrounding context for this essay? Where and when was it first published? Who wrote the essay, and what do you notice about the author’s bio?

The surrounding context of this essay has to do with where, when and who wrote this passage. This essay was published by the World Post, an online website and was written in January of 2014. Where the essay was first introduced was during the World Economic Forum in Davios, Switerzland. This essay was written by Yo-Yo Ma and one thing that I noticed was how many Grammy awards he had won at such a young age, five years old.

2) What is the imposed context? What circumstances surround your personal reading experience? What is your purpose for reading this text?

The imposed context is the purpose for the reading. The purpose of this essay is to incorporate art into a science and have them balance one another. My personal experience with this reading is that it is my first time ever reading about it and hearing of Yo-Yo Mama. The purpose of reading this text was for homework. Our homework for this reading was to annotate and answer the following questions about this essay.

3) Describe the intentional context. What is the rhetorical situation? What is the scope? What is the “so what?”

The intentional context has to do with the rhetorical situation and the scope are the musicians. Yo-Yo Mama believes that art should primarily become involved in children’s education. He also thought education should shift away for STEM and focus more on the equilibrium of global culture. The importance of art helps us humans, dig deeper and helps us engage in discovering who we are as an individual. Like the idea of STEM, it prevents us from looking farther down and creates a barrier from finding ourselves as individuals.

Finally, please choose three unfamiliar words or references to look up. Define or explain these terms in your blog and how Ma uses them in his argument.

Bolster means to support or strengthen, to prop up. Yo-Yo Mama, uses this to explain the support of our new consciousness and how the support could provide us with new energy for creativity within our society.

Bandwidth: range of frequencies within a given band, used for transmitting a signal or can be defined as the mental capacity to deal with a situation. Mama uses this word as describing the ability to understand how the ‘edge effect’ works and how to visually imagine this kind of effect happening in the world nowadays.

Virtuosos: a person who is highly skilled in music or other artistic pursuits. In this essay, Mama uses this terminology to explain how the different global cultures contribute their knowledge to the world but also, other forms of expression.

#1:  As artist feeds off of one another to get a different perspective and grow as a painter.  Within this, the Effective Altruism states, “It doesn’t matter who does something-what matters is that it gets done. And though artists often pride themselves on the uniqueness of their individuality, it doesn’t follow that they have something unique to offer to society”(3, Southan). No matter what an artist creates, I personally think that every art canvas targets a specific grouping in life’s category. It doesn’t matter that the art impact society as a whole. It slowly begins within a small group of individuals and then it progresses onto a bigger group.

Revision #1: The Effective Altruism, a group of individuals who believe that art is not okay in the society we live in today. They believe that art has no relevance and can not contribute to real-world suffering. In short, the Effective Altriums expresses, “It doesn’t matter who does something-what matters is that it gets done. And though artists often pride themselves on the uniqueness of their individuality, it doesn’t follow that they have something unique to offer to society”(3, Southan). In all the Effective Altruism believes that uniqueness of an artist is a rare thing to discover in art and that someone has already created something. Therefore, there is no more room for improvement but one’s own work to display to societies.

#2: Even though there are negative things about artwork and artist all around the world Southan, tries to help individuals see beyond these problems. Southan explains, “But there are plenty of people drawn to the media and the arts who care about making the world better”(5, Southan) it does not matter whether you like art or disagree if art is important. Art is like propaganda to society is grabs certain groups from certain standing and helps rally them in for a cause.

Revision #2: Art has many beneficial aspects to itself. This form of visual representation has the media in all surrounding countries expressing their own thoughts and ideas about real-world issues. Southan himself states, “But there are plenty of people drawn to the media and the arts who care about making the world better”(5, Southan) Art is like propaganda to society is grabs certain groups from certain standing and helps rally them in for a cause to improve the quality of one’s lifestyle.

Before Intro Body ⇑

After edits to Intro Body ⇑

Before edits to Conclusion ⇑

After edits to Conclusion ⇑

The areas of focus that I chose to make changes was my introduction and conclusion paragraphs. After reading my edits from my peers I chose these two bodies because they either needed more support or to break it down into simpler terms. My introduction body paragraph was way too long and hard to follow from what my peers wrote to me. So with this, I decided to cut back on my information that I was had and focus more on my thesis. For example, I had too much information regarding the EA’s so I took that out and focused solely on what I thought art meant to me. Also, from the reading of the little seagull, focusing on the main point of what I was trying to express helped me fix not only my introduction but my conclusion as well.

On the other hand, was my conclusion. I needed to spice it up and add a call to action from my peer edits. After making my edits, I chose to add a question to grab the readers attention and then at the end of it make them think what does art really mean to them as a reader. With the help of the little seagull on the page 28-29, it helped me a lot of what I needed to have in my conclusion. My changes came from reading this section in the book because it enables myself to spice up certain areas of my conclusion.