The chapter I chose to read was chapter one in They Say/I say, Starting with What Others Are Saying. The reason to why I chose this chapter in this book is because I struggle with connecting my main idea back to my theme and or claim sentence. In this chapter, it explains how to introduce the standard view and then to follow up with the support of your claim. This chapters, explains the correct template for making what they say into your own say. For example, what you believe is to be correct or what you assume is to be a valid reason. Another thing to add about this chapter is how to keep your idea of what you say in perspective. The reader won’t be able to follow the unfolding response, therefore, it is the writer’s job to keep reminding the readings what the claim is supposed to be.
Before:
“Anyone can make a masterpiece but artist are the ones that can alter a societies perspective of the art presented. These elitist thought that if you did not create an image of your own masterpiece than you were like everyone else. What the EA’s do not comprehend is that art stems from other artist and helps them to create a mural that affects a greater population.”
After:
A number of the Effective Altruism have suggested that a masterpiece has to be your own thoughts. You would think that a piece of artwork needs the aid of others to gather ideas and new thinkings. At the same time, the Effective altruism sees this perspective as taking from other’s, they want artist ideas or thoughts to be original to this world. If they were not to be then you as an artist are to be plagiarizing the world. In conclusion, as suggested earlier by the effective altruism, the defendants thought of art not obtaining both ways. Their statement suggests that art is supposed to be originally, however, art needs both perspectives in order to grow and inspire other artists within the world.
This is good, but I’m curious why you are writing about Effective Altruism. Is this from your first paper?